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BigIssue P41 2005-04-05 16:17	Long Time No Word Tänkte lägga upp en text som jag arbetar med...tackar för åsikter... It’s life’s strange ways, shout-outs and tears from Moms left alone to never knew who my father is It’s the school education, each one teach one but I Was thought wrong, weed in the bong got some feeling All good, knock on wood if you thinking it’s good To walk true life in the shadows of the forgotten Knowing ya’ might end as nobody, who’s somebody? It’s body, soul and deep concentration, meditation To see how the time fly by without really knowing What future holds, seen the cold world we’re living in Don’t need to grow old to see its life and death In-between some slave to their very last breathe Smoking ses since the brutality, some escape their reality Can you relate? To war and suffer, it’s the crying mothers And the dying children it’s actions we support to precede em’ Forgetting them since we spending money in the wrong things We need weapons and enemies to start a war New bomb on a new Saddam, so damn crazy We living with terror we’re creating and call it democracy? Knowing meaning of c.r.e.a.m. and jobs disappearing make me lazy It’s steady being eyed and hearing lies, underdogs will survive Multiply cause truth does hurt, so I break hearts Leaving the mic with scars after 23 bars, reaching the stars So I climb the highest mountains with thoughts I’m providing I be around, just out of sight
Borttagen 2007-04-05 04:54	Aigh.... puttin my 2 cents in: Big issue.. First off, I see you´re ambitious with it, you´re tryin to go for some life analyzin, concious drop there, and I can dig that.. Now, I said that this would be my 2 cents in. So that bein said, I also have some advice and sum pointers for ya. Big, right off the bat, what first comes to mind in terms of what you immediately and primarly need to work on, and improove, is ya vocab. Your vocab and your english. I see how you´re tryin to be on point and lyrical with it. But what keeps you from doing that, apart from other things, is that you´re not verbally or lyrically there yet. And so, this piece that I´m sure is an honest and sincere attempt at droppin somethin cold on em, comes off as barely luke warm. I´m not hatin on ya or nuthin cat, just makin some observations, and passin on some pointers that´ll hopefully be of help to you. And another thing, what you wanna do when you drop a piece, and you wanna show off lyrical prowess, is YOU GOTTA COME WIDD IT!!! I mean, you gotta be hella tight, you gotta grab a listener´s attention with your first 2 bars!! From begining to end, yer verse gotta be ill, regardless of the subject matter, or your style. You gotta be on point and have some off the hook shit. E´rybody´s got their favourite artists, but don´t let that keep you from doin YOU. And learn how to present YOU, and yer own style, And that goes for both your style, and the lyrical aspect of how you rhyme. Aigh, that´s plenty there.. Build ya skillz and elevate... Stay up. Denna användare har skrivit alla inlägg där användaren har tagits bort från whoa.

2005-04-05 16:17

Long Time No Word

Tänkte lägga upp en text som jag arbetar med...tackar för åsikter...

It’s life’s strange ways, shout-outs and tears from
Moms left alone to never knew who my father is
It’s the school education, each one teach one but I
Was thought wrong, weed in the bong got some feeling
All good, knock on wood if you thinking it’s good
To walk true life in the shadows of the forgotten
Knowing ya’ might end as nobody, who’s somebody?
It’s body, soul and deep concentration, meditation
To see how the time fly by without really knowing
What future holds, seen the cold world we’re living in
Don’t need to grow old to see its life and death
In-between some slave to their very last breathe
Smoking ses since the brutality, some escape their reality
Can you relate? To war and suffer, it’s the crying mothers
And the dying children it’s actions we support to precede em’
Forgetting them since we spending money in the wrong things
We need weapons and enemies to start a war
New bomb on a new Saddam, so damn crazy
We living with terror we’re creating and call it democracy?
Knowing meaning of c.r.e.a.m. and jobs disappearing make me lazy
It’s steady being eyed and hearing lies, underdogs will survive
Multiply cause truth does hurt, so I break hearts
Leaving the mic with scars after 23 bars, reaching the stars
So I climb the highest mountains with thoughts I’m providing

I be around, just out of sight

2007-04-05 04:54

Aigh.... puttin my 2 cents in:

Big issue..

First off, I see you´re ambitious with it, you´re tryin to
go for some life analyzin, concious drop there,
and I can dig that..

Now, I said that this would be my 2 cents in.
So that bein said, I also have some advice and sum pointers for ya.

Big, right off the bat, what first comes to mind in terms of
what you immediately and primarly need to work on, and improove, is ya vocab. Your vocab and your english.

I see how you´re tryin to be on point and lyrical with it.
But what keeps you from doing that, apart from other things,
is that you´re not verbally or lyrically there yet.

And so, this piece that I´m sure is an honest and sincere attempt at
droppin somethin cold on em, comes off as barely luke warm.

I´m not hatin on ya or nuthin cat, just makin some observations,
and passin on some pointers that´ll hopefully be of help to you.

And another thing, what you wanna do when you drop a piece,
and you wanna show off lyrical prowess, is YOU GOTTA COME WIDD IT!!! I mean, you gotta be hella tight, you gotta grab a listener´s attention with your first 2 bars!!

From begining to end, yer verse gotta be ill, regardless of the subject matter, or your style.
You gotta be on point and have some off the hook shit.

E´rybody´s got their favourite artists, but don´t let that keep you
from doin YOU. And learn how to present YOU, and yer own style,
And that goes for both your style, and the lyrical aspect of how you rhyme.

Aigh, that´s plenty there..
Build ya skillz and elevate...
Stay up.

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