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Document - Glipse of faith

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2007-02-18 13:57

Document - Glipse of faith

En gammal text som jag dammat av, dels av nostalgiska skäl, men också på grund av Whoas generösa lagringsutrymme som tillåter mig spara denna i en tryggare databas. Hoppas på mycket kritik!

A marked old man walks in to a streetcorner bar/
his black eyes tells us he´s traveled really far/
single malt on the rocks is directed as an order/
his entrence made everyones eyes act like recorders/
he encounters a chair next to the frostycold window/
the pooring rain reminds him of the visiting rainbow/
every zip from his drink seem to change his expression/
sat down at his table filled with som kind of effection/
hey stranger, what are you doing here so late?/
he answered, by telling me he´d been brought in by fate/
the scar on his left eye told a story on it´s own/
his eyes never met mine, but I could tell he was alone/
the vision mirrors secrets of the soul, i´ve been told/
curiosity made me wan´t to know, why he´d become so cold/
he ignored me for a minute or two and then he said/
"you should be outside living your life, instead,/
of talking to a poor old man who´s haunted by death"/
The intencety from his answers almost stole my breath/
It questioned my questions as if I was speaking to my self/
I soon realized, it wasen´t him, but me, who needed help/


The evening was followed by an ever so living night/
this wasen´t right, like as if it had awoken the moonlight/
His heavy arm lifted up the third drink he´d been served/
the jukebox played a motownsong that I never played or heard/
I asked him about the marks that painted his face/
it had become a map of history to orientate him trough days/
He looked at me and said he´d once came to close to vanity/
the change of personality, was something i´d identify as insanity/
but he tied up the strings and mastered the closeure to/
every subject he touched, left me without a damn clue/
coulden´t really tell what he wanted to let me know/
he´s stories were glimpses from a lifeshow witch I own/
I was scared, started to svet, this coulden´t be real/
he knew exactly what i´ve done, and all the things i fear/
I swear, all my secrets that are locked in my heavy breast/
the barwalls heard confessions that once were put to rest/
he also seemed to know what went on inside, and how I felt/
this was the first and the last time, i ever met myself/

Master of Irony

2007-02-19 13:22
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Master of Irony

2007-02-19 14:04
Berättar tekniken är skit bra!!!!(hade sagt retorik, men osäker på om man kan säga så om en TEXT)
Snyggaste skriva texten jag någonsin läst av dig, visst inte det mest tekniska du gjort men du har teknik så det räcker & blir över ändå, du målar upp det så himla snyggt.. Struktur, formuleringar allt.. Första delen slutar verkligen NICE.. Sen samma grej med sista delen.. Du kan dina avslut..

He looked at me and said he´d once came to close to vanity/
the change of personality, was something i´d identify as insanity/

Favortierna..

//Groupie out
"Inte konstigt att horan är fattig när hon jobbar på timlön!"

2007-02-20 16:04
tack så mycket! :)
Master of Irony

2007-02-21 16:00
Just ja, glömde säga att den här raden kändes lite skumm:

the jukebox played a motownsong that I never played or heard/

that's all
"Inte konstigt att horan är fattig när hon jobbar på timlön!"