Bazookahjoe got that sikk flow..

okay.. you should try to write your bars in like 4-tact..? lots of people won't get how you make your lines then

Huh?

who learned you how to write?.. HAHAHAHAHA

I can't get how you lay it down, but the text was good. Would really like to hear some audio, just to hear you pull that off. Like I said, the text was tight, not a single bad bar. Peace.

My bars are fresh and hard,
like a newly built prison!
Kid listen!
I cut heads like circumcision..

Like ounces to a pound,
headz fiend for my 16.
And I´m twice as nice,
so double up ya efforts,
like split screen!
I stay on my grind, and my lean.
Rollin dirty, but my numbers are clean.
No doubt ock, I STAY on top,
just like whip cream!
On a waffle.
Naah ´mean?
I whup ya whole damn team,
somin right awful!
And this for all you punks,
talkin like ya rhymes are weed.
You´re not a tree yet, boi!!
You STILL a li´l seed!
I got that ill convo, ya´ll know my flow.
On the mic, I slugg it out with fools,
n´ quick to throw a combo!
I´m on fire! Sumin like Ghost rider,
when I bus´, like a driver.  (bus driver)
An ain´t no one son,
I mean NO ONE,
keepin it liver!!
You couldn´t see me,
if ya´ll was blazin maad sess.
My style´z like goin thru the Stargate,
with the wrong intergalactic adress!!
And it really "gets my goat",
that ya´ll can´t see that I´m the G.O.A.T.
I fin´ to call ya styles 8 mile,
cuz of the way you choke.
So sip my flow son,
like non alcoholic Rossi.
Cuz my rhymin´s insane dun!
Like that clown posse!
It´s that cock diesel shit kid,
yo fo´ sho´ to clear ya sinuses.
Go tell ya mommas,
 I´m BIG drama.
And ya´ll is just a minor mess!
You gettin slapped,
when I put the smack into rap.
Like Math, battlein Doze.
Phuccin with my flow´z like,
tryina walk off, an Anna Nicole-type overdose!!!

I re vamped it a tad.

 I added sum periods and commas to it.
restructured the lines a li´l.. etc.

Now, can ya´ll read it??

Just try to see where I´ve put the periods and commas,
and try to follow how my bars go..
You´ll get the hang of it.

PEACE.

Yeah, was easier now. Looking good, keep it up, man.